This is NOT a REVIEW. I give you 5 stars just because. This is a set of SUGGESTIONS on how to improve.
1) You should put more detail into static objects such as background and unanimated scene objects. Windows' glass reflects light and has frames. Walls are rarely just plain color, unless very well painted. So walls are made of bricks, which could be visible at some spots. Tables are wooden, and wooden items have natural patterns on their surface.
1) Chin needs to move up-down when a character talks. Also his head may move a bit during speech when additional effort is put into certain words.
2) Sometimes people blink. Maybe there are people who never blink on public.
3) Characters are too static, doing nothing, making very limited movements or none at all. They should make more movements. Elbows should bend. That left coffee cup arm is too long.
4) The fat boy's poses switch lightning-fast. Need more inbetweening. It won't ruin the effect. Only improve. Or at least clothes should wave around after a fast movement was made.
What I found amazing is the amount and quality of different shots. All very good drawings and each deserves a unique place in Art Portal. wait, this is not a reivew...
From your anonymous fan
Wow, thanks! This is the kind of stuff I was hoping to get from uploading this :D I see and agree every point that you made.
And I love you too anonymous fan for this revi-.... Suggestions :D
You should have went on with Mario about boobs and Batman and stuff.
Should have killed him by Hank walking around and slaughtering everyone in his sight
Think of all the untold sob stories Hank leaves in his wake. My goodness.
I think you did lots of thinking on a philosophic subject and you also portrayed most of the situations, which you were talking about. You might also have added a portion of comedy into this flash. +10 for all of that, but here's the point:
-1 because the voice sounds mechanical, and it is always of same timbre, making it hard to understand who is talking at a moment.
-1 for low detail on non-character items, which makes it hard to understand what an item is. I appreciate your style on characters, but it is often hard to tell if they are holding a knife or a half-opened chocolate bar with wrapping.
-1 because often your "deep" thoughts are, or maybe they just sound like, childish. For example, you depict God as a tall old man with white beard, who is listening/watching your thoughts through a wall/window of your own house.
-1 because, as you can see, I don't like spelling errors. But that's just my personal opinion. Even if it underlines the senselessness/childishness of arguments.
-1 for the swimming animation. It requires higher framerate and people don't swim like that. You shouldn't have included that animation at all, it's absence would have fit your style better.
You need to improve on animation. Make higher framerate, more use of color (there are 16777215 colors), etc.
I remember you, dimb, as a good madness animator.
The sounds, weapons and characters are all well done. Did you make the movie longer at the expense of its creativity?
I found many deaths repetitive, many "smiths"' actions similar (like jumping, shooting, etc). You didn't use Krinkel's golden ideas like pushing a soda vending machine on someone behind it, and victims are being a bit dumb, instead of being careful, hesitant and using various stuff (bodies, tables, etc) as cover.
1) Typical madness plot. No pluses, no minuses, nothing new.
1*) How the hell scientists can wield guns? Especially, how can they jump taller than height of a man with a knife? I thought they rarely do sports.
Conclusion: Don't turn madness into boring repetitive mess. It is supposed to be crazy "Mad" killing of people. "Mad" stands for creative deaths and twists.
Korgoth of Barbaria
This flash has elements that are similar to the ones Adult Swim's Korgoth the Barbarian had:
The protagonist is a huge strong barbarian without full clothing;
He can tear off hands and even throw them into enemies.
He sometimes wields a large axe.
He feels no pain when damaged by lesser attacks like knives or other weapons.
But yours is of course pretty different, but still they are alike. I fully support Korgoth series and any spoofs, including this, so I can't not give you a 10/10. I am absolutely for this. Adult Swim didn't pick up the series, then you should.
This is art
The artwork is really great! But the movie itself is a bit lengthened, I think, it lacks some action. And the animation is a bit not good, I mean the walk cycle, blood, and the fact that the helmets on the faces of the special team members are just placed under round movie clip masks. In blood, and first action scene at the beginning, they both had slow-motion too often.
I know it is not an action movie, but just putting a story into a great flash animation, accompanied by perfect voice-acting and beautifully ambient music is getting bored at a few places. But it is still is very good, but I feel like something is missing in it.
Fair review though i'm not sure what to tell ya, next time though i'll try to fill in those gaps :)
And this is what you call a short cartoon between projects? This must had been a ton of work on special effects, lighting and the water. The visuals are impressing, and the design is making for an absolutely new world, in which a villain with complexes is trying to conquer the world.
If this is what you call short, then the real project made by you may be an hour long and have incredible detail.
By the way, I noticed that there's a lot of red color in your series as whole. Is white-red-black the only color palette you use for this style? It is much better than black-white, that would suit mastermind series as well.
Lots of highlights, same muscular male bodies almost on every piece of art. Lots of muscles, and all same. Tom Fulp looks like a killing machine!
But I really need to mention that the midi-keyboard (of ThatComposerGuy) doesn't actually look like the one which is drawn in this flash. And the gun in Just2Pale is missing load of details (underbarrel, trigger, iron sight) and overall looks fictional.
The waves and explosions are looking sweet.
I'd suggest you add yourself and write: makes great art.
Finally starring pedobear
Making pedobear a hero of flash movies is a great idea. I wish he'd win or you made their fight longer.
And I think this movie lacks camera movements at some points where it's necessary, like the sudden pedobear's attack.
Maybe you could draw something on your own, not just use sprite sheets.
Overall it's not great but it's decent.
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